I love the way you build your characters! You make them look real and you paint their feelings and emotions with so much ease.
Ana, for example, is mentally and emotionally unstable, and this can be easily seen from the way she expresses herself, one moment saying something, the next talking about an entirely different thing. Her thoughts are tangled and she is a mess. Definitely a strong character. Naruo is interesting too. A young adult loving a teen.
This piece reminds me a bit of your "Newton Grove", too. It is the same writing style, more or less. Just that this time is from a girl's POV.
Despite the confusing parts, where Ana shows us her delusions and mental instability, the writing is poetic and delicate.
Oh, and before I forget, your metaphors are great. You managed to make use of the aesthetic of the ugly and twist it around, creating some great imagery.
I wanna see how this develops later on. The triangle you drew is quite interesting and I don't think I've ever read this kind of story before.
By the way, I like how you ended the 70th chapter.
Keep it up, and update soon~!
on Mon, 28 September 2015 10:18:20