Love the Sinner : by Kinetic Novels :: Genre : Cell Phone Novel

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This story is wonderfully written, I havent had a chance to finish it yet, but so far I am hooked in..the feeling of wanting to know more reminds me of when I would read a Dan Brown book! Im sure that there is a grammatical faux paux in there somewhere, but I honestly havent had found anything to critique yet..I love the ballsy move of the opening scene! You really kick the reader in the gut and make them ask for more..cant wait to finish this! .
By: M. Harlow on Tue, 23 March 2010 17:13:09

editor's pick- Your writing is wonderful.
By: kathleen ball on Wed, 17 March 2010 12:51:53

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By: Textnovel Team on Wed, 17 March 2010 09:33:59

i agree..very vivid scenes. i rarely see that on cellphone novels..great story and writing :).
By: idle_as_always on Tue, 23 February 2010 02:26:43

Thank you, nick. And yes, Karra, the slaughter scene is a test to see who will keep reading. I'm glad you like it. :).
By: Kinetic Novels on Mon, 15 February 2010 14:08:02

Holy moly. The imagery for killing the lamb almost made me cry. The poor lamb! Haha. I quite like it -- even though I feel so bad for the lamb. Keep it up!.
By: Karra Christina on Mon, 15 February 2010 13:59:21

Love the title and the imagery..
By: nick.colls on Mon, 15 February 2010 12:56:56

Thank you, Kathleen. I'm trying to develop the setting a little bit at a time and I think you will be surprised by what develops..
By: Kinetic Novels on Mon, 15 February 2010 12:47:44

it's very different from what I usually read but it's intriguing. You pay a lot of attention to detail which is great- it makes everything seem authentic..
By: kathleen ball on Mon, 15 February 2010 12:36:17

See Jacket Copy And Foreword/Preface

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Chapter 14:- Around the dorms
The circuit around the women’s dormitory was long and gave her time to think. The nose of the taser patted against Mara’s thigh as she walked, a comforting reminder of authority. Occasionally a shadow would move in a window and Mara would look inside. She took in just enough to do her job of guarding the peace, then looked away before any other details could register. What happened inside the dormitory, unless there was a fight or escape attempt, did not interest her. When she made her route around the dorms, her gaze was always fixed outward. She walked on.

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