Thank you so much, Amber. I'm excited that Skeletons in the Closet & Other Creepy Stories (including this one) will be launching in August. Celebration time!!! Whoo-ooo!! :-) http://www.cherylktardif.com .
By:  Cheryl Kaye Tardif  on  Mon, 19 July 2010 20:19:10

Congrats on getting this and your other creepy tales published!.
By:  Amber Dane  on  Mon, 19 July 2010 19:46:12

For sheer, unparralelled brilliance from a very talented author, I vote for you. Write on! You are someone to be admired!.
By:  Kingdom Writer  on  Sat, 13 February 2010 15:58:13

I found this to be well-written and tightly written (and enjoyable). It is clever and to the point without distractions. Good flow, good interest, good pace and construction. One character inconsistency could be edited easily. You used good, strong and brief sections of text (very appropriate for the Textnovel format) and you managed to move the reader forward without needing dramatic cliffhangers or hooks. Your text divisions appear well-planned. I did enjoy this Textnovel greatly, but think it's too short as a stand-alone unless a publisher considers an alternate format (rather than standard novel).I hope these notes are helpful, they are only my POV as a writer and editor--always remember your story is your own to tell, and please take all constructive criticism as such. I wish you great (well, I guess I should say "continued" ;-)success. :-) Nice work!.
By:  ShannonReinbold-Gee  on  Fri, 09 January 2009 14:23:27

Great story! I could really picture the characters and the whole time had a half smile when I thought about how Beatrice just wanted Harry to go away and then she just had to click the off button. It was very entertaining and holds an inner meaning about people that read "The Secret" should be careful with the Universal Powers! Vicki Bruce Sunderland, ON.
By:  Vicki Bruce  on  Thu, 20 November 2008 15:36:16

Harold is the king of couch potatoes, and is always wanting things to fall into his lap. Fame and fortune should not have to be earned when you can simply win a lottery. This is a comical view of this king's life and every day I read a chapter it makes me wonder. In the words of his wife Beatrice “Just what are you up to, Harold Fielding?”.
By:  Rusty Tallman  on  Wed, 12 November 2008 22:15:50